{"id":1873,"date":"2022-01-13T13:45:29","date_gmt":"2022-01-13T13:45:29","guid":{"rendered":"https:\/\/bethturnage.com\/?p=1873"},"modified":"2022-01-13T16:16:34","modified_gmt":"2022-01-13T16:16:34","slug":"writing-style-adverbs-to-modify-said","status":"publish","type":"post","link":"https:\/\/bethturnage.com\/?p=1873","title":{"rendered":"#Writing style: adverbs to modify “said”?"},"content":{"rendered":"

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(Beth Turnage)<\/strong> A Quoran posted this question:<\/p>\n

What is wrong with using an adverb to modify the word “said”?<\/strong><\/p>\n

And here is my take:<\/p>\n

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This is an offshoot of \u201cshowing vs. telling.\u201d<\/p>\n

When you use an adverb you are \u201ctelling.\u201d<\/p>\n

\u201cTelling\u201d is a less immersive reading experience, and often conveys less meaning than describing the emotional beat of the scene.<\/p>\n

As an example:<\/p>\n

\u201cGreat,\u201d he said sarcastically.<\/p>\n

Versus:<\/p>\n

James\u2019 mouth twitched at my news, and he shifted his stance to lean against the bookcase. But instead of relaxing as his body suggested, his eyes narrowed as he studied my face. What was he trying to parse? Did he suspect I lied to him?<\/p>\n

The corners of his mouth curled upward and I could see the skepticism in his eyes. He pulled a cigarette from his inside suit pocket knowing I despised the things, lit it, turned his head away, and drew in, then let out a long breath.<\/p>\n

\u201cGreat,\u201d he said.<\/p>\n

What did you learn about the characters in this little scene? Do you not sense of tension between the two? Don\u2019t you just feel the sarcasm in his one-word utterance?<\/p>\n

When you use an adverb you miss out on a storytelling opportunity that broadens the emotional content of the scene.<\/p>\n

You use an adverb when the pacing of a scene is quick and you don\u2019t want to bog it down with too many words. Otherwise, it\u2019s your duty as a writer to flesh out that scene.<\/p>\n

Storytelling is a marathon, not a sprint.<\/p>\n<\/div>\n

This piece originally appeared here: https:\/\/oxfordcomma.quora.com\/What-is-wrong-with-using-an-adverb-to-modify-the-word-said?top_ans=329795969<\/a><\/div>\n<\/div>\n<\/div>\n<\/div>\n

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(Beth Turnage) A Quoran posted this question: What is wrong with using an adverb to modify the word “said”? And here is my take: This is an offshoot of \u201cshowing vs. telling.\u201d When you use an adverb you are \u201ctelling.\u201d \u201cTelling\u201d is a less immersive reading experience, and often conveys less meaning than describing the […]<\/p>\n","protected":false},"author":2,"featured_media":1875,"comment_status":"open","ping_status":"open","sticky":false,"template":"","format":"standard","meta":{"om_disable_all_campaigns":false,"_monsterinsights_skip_tracking":false,"_monsterinsights_sitenote_active":false,"_monsterinsights_sitenote_note":"","_monsterinsights_sitenote_category":0,"_uf_show_specific_survey":0,"_uf_disable_surveys":false,"footnotes":"","jetpack_publicize_message":"","jetpack_publicize_feature_enabled":true,"jetpack_social_post_already_shared":false,"jetpack_social_options":{"image_generator_settings":{"template":"highway","default_image_id":0,"font":"","enabled":false},"version":2}},"categories":[1],"tags":[357,350,359,331,353,351,355,332,356,347,348,349,358,352,354],"class_list":["post-1873","post","type-post","status-publish","format-standard","has-post-thumbnail","hentry","category-uncategorized","tag-poetsandwriters","tag-typewriter","tag-womenwriters","tag-writer","tag-writercommunity","tag-writerlife","tag-writerofinstagram","tag-writers","tag-writers_den_","tag-writerscommunity","tag-writerslife","tag-writersnetwork","tag-writersociety","tag-writersofinsta","tag-writerssociety"],"jetpack_publicize_connections":[],"_links":{"self":[{"href":"https:\/\/bethturnage.com\/index.php?rest_route=\/wp\/v2\/posts\/1873","targetHints":{"allow":["GET"]}}],"collection":[{"href":"https:\/\/bethturnage.com\/index.php?rest_route=\/wp\/v2\/posts"}],"about":[{"href":"https:\/\/bethturnage.com\/index.php?rest_route=\/wp\/v2\/types\/post"}],"author":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/bethturnage.com\/index.php?rest_route=\/wp\/v2\/users\/2"}],"replies":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/bethturnage.com\/index.php?rest_route=%2Fwp%2Fv2%2Fcomments&post=1873"}],"version-history":[{"count":4,"href":"https:\/\/bethturnage.com\/index.php?rest_route=\/wp\/v2\/posts\/1873\/revisions"}],"predecessor-version":[{"id":1880,"href":"https:\/\/bethturnage.com\/index.php?rest_route=\/wp\/v2\/posts\/1873\/revisions\/1880"}],"wp:featuredmedia":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/bethturnage.com\/index.php?rest_route=\/wp\/v2\/media\/1875"}],"wp:attachment":[{"href":"https:\/\/bethturnage.com\/index.php?rest_route=%2Fwp%2Fv2%2Fmedia&parent=1873"}],"wp:term":[{"taxonomy":"category","embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/bethturnage.com\/index.php?rest_route=%2Fwp%2Fv2%2Fcategories&post=1873"},{"taxonomy":"post_tag","embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/bethturnage.com\/index.php?rest_route=%2Fwp%2Fv2%2Ftags&post=1873"}],"curies":[{"name":"wp","href":"https:\/\/api.w.org\/{rel}","templated":true}]}}